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2018-04-18 提交的作品

老师好，请帮我点评一下这款条版微信朋友圈的广告。
目的是为了在微信朋友圈宣更好的传播扩散，自己做的时候脑子里没有好的想法，客户给的资料和图片放进去后就排成这样了。

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孙圣朝

孙圣朝

编排设计／画册／海报

2018-04-23 点评

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总评：
1、这幅作品没有主线，基本上是元素堆砌，后果就是非常难用。
2、好用为前提，做有用的设计，先做对再说美。
3、颜色越多设计就越复杂，信息获取成本（时间）就越大。

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